Comment on my poem “Beauty Preserved in a Glass?”?
Beauty preserved in a glass,
Sheltered from decay
By an airtight flask,
Dried, pressed, and put on display,
A plant without a thirst
Or need of sunlit day,
Or so it seems.
Perfection locked in a glass,
The loveliness seen
Through a clean clear flask,
Roses flawless weaved akin
Into a charming bouquet,
Graced by drooping leaves of green,
Or so it seems.
Nature imprisoned in a glass,
Fated several years to last,
In a cramped and tiny flask,
Without natural sustenance,
Yet of such it is a mask,
On which rest its beauty,
Or so it seems.
A fallen petal in the glass
Hints of more to fall,
The sign of a leaking flask.
Now every bud stands tall,
But each with time will stoop.
Beauty withers beneath this law,
And so it seems.
Horsewisperer
on February 8th, 2012
It sounds Beauty and the Beast inspired. I like it but it begins confusing:preseved, shattered by decay, air tight flask (huh?)
BlindPoet
on February 8th, 2012
Bravo,Bravo good job,really liked it.